Friday, April 26, 2013

Trial 1

Trifecta challenge is to write a 33 word composition with a hypenated compound word. Sam Edge has written one hard to beat.
Sam Edge's entry.

This is trial 1.


Moving from under the bridge to a seedy interstate motel, the eye-catching woman had Black jeans, black t-shirt, large breasts stretched to her waist.  Black braid belt, shirt taut, bright orange hair gleaming.

10 comments:

  1. Wow. You packed a lot of story in these 33 words. Great descriptive words though the breasts stretched down to the waist sound a little scary! :)

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    1. The actual woman looked like a country club type. Her hair was blonde streaked with a redneck cut. Thats what made her stand out. She obviously was a working girl but she looked like you could clean her up, put on a suburban woman's clothes and be quite attractive. If I were to rewrite, I think I would say breasts flacid on ribcage. lol, I was not creative this week.

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  2. Definitely eye-catching or should one say an eye sore?lol!Loved the larger than life picture you painted of this woman Ann:-)Btw,there is a typo I think-you meant " shirt taut" and not "taunt" possibly?

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    1. Two heads are better than one. I spelled it wrong. You're kind to suggest typo. Thanks. The woman was real. What was shocking is she was attractive even though I know she was homeless. Thanks again.

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  3. She sounds like a keeper :/ haha cute piece

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  4. Orange hair does beg for attention. Between that and the tight shirt, it seems like she knew how to market herself well :)

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  5. I really enjoyed reading this. Honestly, I could picture the woman and the breast description. I have seen 'would be attractive women if cleaned up and dressed better' dressed exactly like you described in your piece. They aren't working girls or homeless. I just live in a small town in Southwest Va where make up, hair stacked, tight shirts and jeans, and large bust so they seemingly at first don't have a waist. lol. Or maybe I'm just picturing them while reading this. Either way, this was wonderful!

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  6. It's funny because one does see colorful characters like this all the time.

    Thanks for linking up!

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  7. Take a drive anywhere around here these days and you could get quite a collection! I think I know that bridge. haha.
    Love the contrast of seedy motel and gleaming orange hair.

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  8. I don't know, I kind of like yours. I thought the 'black braid belt' interesting in the descriptions...

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