Alex or Big A’s dreadlocks fall below his shoulders. With a new
tattoo on his ass and the west coast rave clothes, he might be 42 but he is
still cool. He thought about putting a
teardrop under his eye but the old man said he would cut him off from his funds
if he got a tattoo on his face.
Just a regular
trustafarian peacock at a prominent film festival, Big A goes to any party he
wants. It is late in the evening, Thursday night, and the party is slow. Some
crazy fools get up in the morning to watch films. Alex and his crew watch the
end of the night movie and then PARTEH! All the players, hangers, climbers,
backstabbers, lovers, haters, dancers, singers, you name it show what they got
to one another.
In walks this
redneck, the crowd is already subdued and the background noise drops another
decibel. Sandy red hair cropped short, reddened skin, a beak of a nose
untouched by a scalpel, his blue green eyes contract as if absorbing all that he
sees.
"Alright
folks, what did you think?” the man says.
The hot chick to his left hops off the bar stools and sashays to
the rube. Alex had his eye on her. He had turned and winked at her and got a
little smile. When he finished scanning the crowd, he was going to talk to
her.
The server walks past him to the rustic yokel.
A clean-cut black dude walks in with a woman who is probably his
wife. She is wearing a corsage. Is this an alien invasion or 1956? You would
think they could spend a little money on clothes.
“How did you get invited to this party?” Big A bellows as he
swaggers up to the odd group.
“Make a good movie and if the sun is shining bright, a door will
open for you boy.”
Jim Morrison is said by some to be still alive. Maybe that is the door that will open for you.
ReplyDeleteSome folks think Elvis hasn't left the building either. lol, I have never been cool a day in my life.
Delete42 and still cool ... that's me! hahaha
ReplyDeleteMy kind of man, make it up as you go. he he he.
DeletePoor Alex! I don't think anyone will be appreciating that new tattoo;)
ReplyDeleteI know. laughs It's hard to be original when everyone else is doing it.
DeleteNicely done, haha. I particularly like the part about his almost-realized face tattoo, except that his old man (who must be literally an old man at this point) would cut him off.
ReplyDeleteGood thing Alex has dear old dad. He needs someone to help him rein it in until father time does it for him. I remember this old man wearing tons of gold chains trying to hang out with us during my college days. It's hard to be cool when your body prefers relaxed fit Levi jeans.
DeleteThis is an interesting piece. Just be careful--Trifecta accepts the prompt word only in the form given. So maybe the plural form of door in your last line could be edited to the singular form?
ReplyDeleteFixed it. Although I am a long way from being a contender. I enjoy reading everybody else's post and creating a story. I was a science teacher. Language arts are so good at detail which I am not.
DeleteGreat style, atmosphere and absolutely wonderful first line!
ReplyDeleteThanks. I have never been cool but I know what it looks like. laughs.
DeletePoor Alex...he thinks he's cool :) I like that the 'redneck' busted into the 'to be seen' crowd.
ReplyDeleteIt is nice to see the underdog come out on top.
DeleteTrustifarian peacock...I love it!
ReplyDeleteI would like to claim it but it is urban slang. I understand these types are prominent at the South by Southwest film festival. Hence the idea for story. It is ironic they get a better seat than the people who create.
Delete42 and still living off the old parents! Not a good way to be! Not that I'm much better!
ReplyDeleteI know. I wouldn't mind the comfort of having a trust fund but it is like never growing up to not support yourself.
DeleteSuddenly my low-key, partyless life seems much more attractive! Great dig, Ann!
ReplyDeleteWhile surfing the web, I read an article about social climbing. People who would spend all they have to emulate the trustafarian peacocks at SXSW. All I could think was why. I have never been a part of such a high life.
DeleteI loved it - even though I felt it coming.
ReplyDeletesmall typo "he was going to talks to her."
(RogRites)
Thanks. Substance versus shadow, what else would a writer choose.
DeleteI loved the trustafarian peacock. Where do you get this stuff? Great read.
ReplyDeleteHonestly, an article on the web about social climbing. Thanks.
DeleteThis is such a fun piece Ann! You've done such a good job painting your character. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you've created this whole "scene" with the hipsters and hangers-on and the rest of the crowd. Great writing.!
ReplyDeleteThat beak of a nose was a nice touch.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad his dad said ixnay to the teardrop tattoo. He didn't need it anyway! :D
ReplyDeleteI loved the writing style! What characters too!
ReplyDeleteHa!ha!Loved the tongue in cheek digs you took society's facetious people who pretend to be someone else & how money makes most people "acceptable"-great take Ann:-)
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you showed Alex, you gave so much information on him in such a short space. I really enjoyed it. LM x
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