Monday, June 3, 2013

Super Freak.

When I read the trifecta challenge, I thought of Rick James and the song "Super Freak". Below is a 1982 video of him and the song. A fun blast from the past. I updated the post and changed it from 495 words to 323 words.

Disco was over, no one did the hustle, Sara Bell wanted to go to bed and pull the covers over her head. That would mess her hair and ruin her make-up and Eric could still come.

Picking up the newspaper to read, that damn dog downstairs was yipping.  

Stomping to the refrigerator and back, Sara makes an angry burst of stomps.

Old lady Mauldlin hits the ceiling. Sara walks into the bathroom, turns on the shower and focuses the water so it will leak in Mrs. Mauldlin’s bathroom.

Taking a triumphant stomp, the floor collapses beneath her right foot. Steam envelops her. 

Kneeling in pain, willing herself not to cry, tears flow.  

She told Mrs. Mauldlin if she had a BB gun she would shoot her yapping dog this morning.

Mrs. Mauldling called her a “trumpet”. She told her mother later that afternoon.

“Sara, why would she call you a “strumpet”.

“I don’t know. She is a mean old bag.”

“Are you having multiple sex partners.”

“What? Why would you think that?”

“She’s not calling you a trumpet, she’s calling you a strumpet. She’s saying you’re promiscuous.”

“I’m not a freak.” Sara slammed the phone down.

Something sharp prevented her from pulling her leg from the floor. Mrs. Mauldlin and the building manager talk.

“There’s her foot. She’s not responding.”

Sara talks to them but they cannot hear.

Mrs. Mauldlin says call 911.

The building manager says, “We don’t need to do that.”

The door closes downstairs. Mrs. Mauldlin speaks to 911.

The floor isn’t sturdy under her left knee. Water was trickling down the wall to puddle on the linoleum under Sara.

The manager argued with the firefighters.

The firefighters removed a section of the floor. “We’re going to lift you on three.”

The bruises faded to green, her knee aches before it rains, the long angry scratch healed. Sara helped Mrs. Mauldlin move. Sara hung up on Eric when he called.


  1. I love the return to Eric at the end. This was a really interesting piece. It feels incredibly sad. Thanks so much for linking up.

  2. I like the sense of routine in the neighbors' acts against each other, and then the break from that routine at the end.

  3. Close quarters with neighbors we dislike can be challenging. I'm glad she got rid of Eric in end, and that she found enough peace with her neighbor to help with the move.

  4. I am so glad I live in a home surrounded by plenty of grass to buffer and eliminate this interaction. Dealing with the wife and kids is enough excitement.

  5. Sara is having a bad day, it seems. :) I'm with Draug - I like the almost comfortable ill will between the neighbors.

  6. I love the detail of her pointing the shower so that it leaks on Mrs. Maudlin (great name).

  7. Brings home "do unto others" in a unique way. You have a lively character in Sara!


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